Author’s Note: This short story was written when I was ten years old. To the Grammar Police, kindly pardon the errors. 

“Ronald,” Elizabeth Clark called her fourteen-year-old son to buy good in the grocery. It was the season of fall so Elizabeth had to rake all the fallen leaves in their yard. Ronald agreed.

While riding on his bike, Ronald saw a narrow road which he had not seen before. He thought he can find a shortcut there. He followed the road. Minutes passed, but Ronald realized he was just biking in the same place all over again. “Blasting balls! I thought this is a short cut!” He exclaimed. “I’d better go back.”

By the time he turned his bike to go back, he was shocked to find there’s no way out, he was surrounded by high walls. So he just went on the other road. “Let’s see,” Ronald muttered. Suddenly, Ronald bumped on a rock and ended up with a crash. He shook his head as his bike was broken.

“I can’t believe this!” Ronald said. He stopped moving, and he began to panic when he heard a strange noise behind the bush. Somebody’s calling him. “Who- who’s that?” He asked, with his legs shaking as he tried to stand.

Without even a second, a strange, snake-like animal with a magic spring look tied him up the tree, bringing him high. “Whoa!” The monster shaked shook him and swallowed Ronald whole. Ronald landed in the creature’s stomach safely without fracture but lost consciousness.

Meanwhile, Elizabeth was worried. “What’s taking him so long?” She thought. Elizabeth then takes took up her coat and went outside to search for her son.

An hour or so passed and Ronald regained consciousness. “It’s dark and spooky in here,” he said.

“Yuck,” he muttered as he stared at the bulging blood vessels and organs of the creature. He then tried to climb through the esophagus. It’s hard, because it’s slippery. But finally he succeeded. He slowly opened the mouth of the creature. “I’m lucky he’s asleep,” Ronald said to himself then ran away.

Meanwhile, Elizabeth found nobody had seen Ronald, so she managed to go home and just waited. “I hope he is alright,” Elizabeth said.

Ronald saw his broken bike. Beside it was a note. It was a map in how (sic) to get out. And he used it. Finally, he saw the way out and was back in the city headed for the telephone booth. Calling his Mom, he explained what had happened in a fast way.

“I’m going to visit Dr. Dickens, he’s a zoologist and a scientist, Mom. Don’t worry I’ll be alright,” he mumbled.

“Okay,” Elizabeth answered. And they both hung up.

Ronald proceeded to Dr. Dickens. He then explained what had happened. “I’m going to study that creature and keep it in a secured laboratory to stay away from danger,” Dr. Dickens decided. “I’ll take care where we can find it,” Ronald offered. “We’ll meet on Thursday and work on my plan,” Dr. Dickens said. Ronald went back home and Elizabeth hugged and kissed her son.

Ronald told her that he and Dr. Dickens made an agreement to capture Sucker Spring.

“What’s a Sucker Spring?” Elizabeth asked.

“The creature I told you about,” he said.

“Oh no, no my dear. It’s too risky.”

But Ronald tried and tried to convince his mother, and later on it worked.

By Thursday, Ronald is ready. Dr. Dickens and his companions and Ronald headed to the Sucker Spring’s dwelling.

“It’s asleep,” Ronald said. “It’s our chance.”

“Now, Drake, load the creature into the cage carefully. We must not wake it. Just follow my instructions,” Dr. Dickens said to one of his companions. It was a very big cage, for Sucker Spring was 30 feet long. It was a hard time capturing the snoring monster. Hours later and after much difficulty, they all exclaimed “Gotcha!” and succeeded in capturing the creature.

Ronald bid goodbye to Dr. Dickens and went home while the zoologist and his companions placed the Sucker Spring in a secured lab where he studied it. Everyone wondered why Sucker Spring is always sleeping.

(c) 1998 Vivien Marie Lopez

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The inspiration behind Sucker Spring. Yes, a slinky toy.
And this is the original, typewritten, 1998-old “manuscript.”

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